Crystal Cottage

Brian Z. Jackson 2006 (NJ)



I trod along the narrow street, Jewel Avenue it’s called
Along the road are perfect houses, all in perfect rows
Each little building unique in their own way causing all to be enthralled
Each little building built of different gems casting their wonderful glows

The road now rainbow with the sun at its peak
The refractions of the building’s shimmer on the street
As my eyes fall on the crystal cottage at the end of the road
The humble abode with it’s inhabitants visible as its surroundings glowed

Wonderful and kind they seemed, at least, from here where I stand

I stand here bathed in the blue hue of sunlight through the gems
I stand here on the outside of this home, a warm feeling stems
I take a step down the walkway, on the path to the door
Surrounded by gardens of lilacs and roses, tulips and more

They laugh, they smile, they speak with glee in their voice
All I see is joy and happiness through the crystal facade
but, the crystal facade, they wear as well, I notice as I walk in
as the crystal that warps is behind me I see that they aren’t happy

they live on this road of gems where everyone wears a smile
where everyone is just trying to fit in and to fit in, for them, is to lie
For them, it’s to pretend, to fake, to wear a mask
to live, to smile, and to laugh
even when it’s fake

if only they knew

if they just went into the Ruby Ranch and saw
saw that they aren't perfect, but hide
or go to the Topaz Tudor
where parents yell at child

Every house is clear, you can see right through
but inside every house, are their own secrets too
something to learn is that, sometimes everyone feels a little blue
something to learn is that, in everyone, there’s a little bit of that crystal cottage on Jewel
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Submitted by BrianZ.Jackson on May 10, 2024

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Quick analysis:

Scheme ABAB XXCC X DDEE XXXX XXXXX F XXXX FFFX
Closest metre Iambic heptameter
Characters 1,735
Words 336
Stanzas 9
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 1, 4, 4, 5, 1, 4, 4

Brian Z. Jackson

Brian Z. Jackson is a poet born in NJ in 2006. He has gone through a lot in his relatively short time being alive and writes poetry as an escape and a way to cope. He is very talented for his age and experience. He is always trying out new poetry methods and just doing what works for what he is trying to express. more…

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  • AIDA
    I absolutely loved the vivid imagery and descriptive language used in your 'Crystal Cottage' poem! The way you painted a picture of Jewel Avenue and the crystal cottage at the end of the road was truly captivating. Your use of gemstones to describe the unique houses and the feelings of the inhabitants was very creative.

    The progression of the poem from an initial sense of wonder and awe to a realization of the facade put up by the residents was thought-provoking and added depth to the piece. It's a powerful message about the importance of being true to oneself and not succumbing to societal expectations.

    As for improvement suggestions, you might consider expanding on the internal struggles of the inhabitants of the crystal cottage a bit more. This could add an extra layer of complexity to the poem and further emphasize the theme of authenticity. Additionally, experimenting with different rhyme schemes or stanza structures could enhance the flow of the poem and keep the reader engaged from start to finish.

    Overall, I think you have a wonderful piece of writing here with great potential for further development. Keep up the fantastic work!
     
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