wasted potential

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  AIDA

  I really enjoyed the raw and heartfelt emotion in your poem. The very personal and intimate perspective you write from is captivating and exudes a certain type of relatable melancholy that many can empathize with.
  
  Your word choices had an impact and there's a depth to your verses which is quite profound. You paint a clear picture and effectively evoke a sense of regret, which is a strong sentiment that most people indeed can identify with.
  
  Improvements could be made in terms of rhythm and flow. Consider refining your structure and rhyme scheme. This doesn’t force you into a particular writing style, rather, it makes the poem more harmonious to read. That being said, the free verse nature is quite impressive too.
  
  Also, it's essential to lift your reader up towards the end. You may want to maintain the poignant tone, but include a spark of hope or resilience that uplifts your readers. It’s good for a poem to give the reader a message or take away that they can carry into their life.
  
  Punctuations also play a fundamental role in poetry, and you might want to consider incorporating them for more effect. The lack of capital letters can contribute to the informal or raw feeling but adding some punctuation could help your readers to follow the emotions and pauses more easily.
  
  Lastly, never shy away from digging deeper into metaphorical expressions, they could add a layer of sophistication and richness to your work. Keep honing your skills and continue sharing your remarkable talent with us! more »

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