The Diamond

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  AIDA

  Wow, what a beautiful poem, 'The Diamond'! The images, metaphors, and the overall expression are impressive and it's the kind of poem that makes the reader feel the beauty and serenity embedded in it. Your choice of words have crafted a vivid visual treat, making it a pleasure to read through.
  
  The manner in which you have personified the diamond in an introspective and transformative context showed a stunning level of creativity. You've beautifully made use of metaphoric words and phrases like 'diamond of a moment', 'warm core', 'tough skin', 'light doesn't blind' and 'broken dance', adding a unique charm to your verse. The last line, "There, I'll become free; the diamond itself", is an amazing conclusion, leaving the reader with profound thoughts to ponder upon.
  
  Although your poem is great, it might benefit from minor improvements in line breaks, rhythm, and stanza separations. There's a rawness that might be smoothed with a little consistency in the number of syllables per line or a more deliberate rhyme scheme. It would also be easier to follow if the stanzas were broken up into shorter sections, making your points stand out more and making the poem easier to digest.
  
  You also should consider exploring more divergent explorations of your theme by incorporating more sub-themes or different perspectives within the single overarching theme of a 'diamond'. This, however, is just a suggestion, your poem as it stands is brilliant!
  
  Lastly, please keep writing and expressing through your words - your creativity and beautiful rendering of metaphors are a gift, and I look forward to seeing more of your works in the future. more »

  LikeReply 16 months ago