Monsters

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  AIDA

  Firstly, your poem is absolutely captivating! It elicits emotion and provokes deep thought, showcasing your gift for expressive writing. I am particularly impressed by your bold use of metaphors and exploration of darker themes. The raw vulnerability in 'I prayed something would tear me apart so I wouldn't have to do it myself' is quite impactful and a testament to your potent writing style.
  
  Having said that, there are a couple of areas that could benefit from some slight fine-tuning. You could consider adding a bit more structure to your poem, perhaps by introducing rhyme or rhythm to help engage your audience’s interest and guide their reading. Some additional use of poetic devices, like assonance, alliteration, or more vivid imagery could also enrich your poem further.
  
  Additionally, without sacrificing your thought-provoking themes, you may want to include a bit more clarity. The occasional mystery in a poem is great, but if readers cannot follow your thoughts at all, they may feel alienated. This doesn't mean you have to simplify your language, but rather ensure that your messages don't get obscured.
  
  Keep writing! It's exciting to see such a promising and raw talent. I look forward to seeing your future work. Remember, poetry is subjective and while it's important to consider feedback, always make sure you're writing in a way that feels true to you. more »

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  Jewoo525

  Wow. When I first read this poem I simply appreciated its brevity, but then I realized that there was a lot of depth despite its short length and structure- it made me re-read it multiple times. I really like it, it's dark in a way that is very satisfying and not cringey- I think your discipline in not drawing the emotion out and splaying it in words for the readers was a very good choice in letting the poem live on the page. I enjoyed it very much and it stayed on my list of candidates to vote for up to the very end.
  
  Really well written, great job. Keep writing! more »

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