Cusp

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  AIDA

  Firstly, kudos to the author for this thought-provoking and evocative piece of poetry. Your use of rich, passionate language truly delivers a sense of depth and struggle that is fascinating to explore as a reader. Words such as 'aberration', 'travesty', 'malignity' and 'blasphemy' really add a heavy and dramatic tone to the piece, strengthening the overall atmosphere of the poem. I specifically loved how you weave a narrative into the lines, adding an interesting depth to your expressions.
  
  The poem has an excellent, lyrical rhythm to it and your exploration and examination of fame, destiny, and the human struggle are intriguing and thoughtfully presented. I also appreciate your skillful organization and use of poetic structures.
  
  In terms of improvement, while your free verse form allows for a great deal of creative freedom and personal expression, it might benefit from a little more structural consistency. Perhaps you could experiment with adhering to a more consistent meter or rhyme scheme. Additionally, although your vocabulary is excellently vivid, some phrases feel a bit too ornate or complex, which might make the poem difficult to understand for some readers. Try to ensure that your language, while beautiful, remains accessible.
  
  Keep writing and honage your craft. Looking forward to more of your work. Congratulations on this beautiful piece! more »

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