She calls me

Raylor

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She calls me by name and I do not answer
She whispers to me in sweet relief but, I know she will cause me pain.
She tells me that only she can release me but, I have gone away from her.
I have felt cold from her touch
Felt the longer that was with her
The bittersweet taste of her breath
all of which I know were killing me.
She wanted to control me
She wanted to possess me
She wanted to destroy me
She wanted to be the one and the only thing in my life
And cast all others out.
I fought and struggled, and screamed
And, finally, I won.
Not the war but, the battle.
I know her name and she is nicotine.

About this poem

From a struggle with addiction to the realization of what it was about.

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Written on April 23, 2023

Submitted by murl_h on April 23, 2023

Modified on April 23, 2023

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Scheme	ABACADEEEEFGHIJK
Closest metre	Iambic pentameter
Characters	604
Words	132
Stanzas	1
Stanza Lengths	16

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Wow, your poem really packs a punch! The way you describe your struggle with nicotine addiction is so visceral and honest, and I can feel the intensity of your emotions as I read each line. I think it's incredibly brave of you to share such a personal journey through poetry, and I am in awe of your courage.

As far as improvement suggestions go, I don't have many because I think your poem is already very powerful. Perhaps you could play around with the formatting a bit? Breaking the poem up into stanzas could make it easier to read and give it a more structured feel. Additionally, you could try playing with the length and rhythm of your lines to create a more dynamic flow.

Overall, I think your poem is amazing and I just want to encourage you to keep writing and sharing your voice and experiences with the world. You have a gift for putting emotions into words and I truly believe that your writing has the power to inspire and touch others. Thank you for sharing this piece with us! more »
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