Sometimes

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  smahalanobis2008

  It's simply brilliant. What amazing simplicity!

  LikeReply3 months ago
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  ritchiechelle

  Beautiful in its simplicity. A perfect example of less saying more.

  LikeReply 14 months ago
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    Soulwriter

    thanks!

    LikeReply4 months ago
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  MaxwellBurchett

  Yes, sometimes best. Although more difficult. But you've done it here. Kudos! Max

  LikeReply 15 months ago
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  Caliconine

  Yes, I love short poems, with big messages. Thank you for sharing. Write On

  LikeReply 15 months ago
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  melissak.k1970

  The poem’s concise nature drives home the weight of topics like justice and unrest with impactful brevity. Its simplicity is a testament to the idea that sometimes less is more when expressing complex themes. Nice work! more »

  LikeReply 25 months ago
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  dcoad

  Less is more. I know what you mean. Nice work.

  LikeReply 17 months ago
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  Charles2

  i imagine... this to be a spark from the mind/experience. A beginning/kindling to an open ended exploration of who we are at heart ...to impel the reader to grasp the idea and let it flow.

  LikeReply 18 months ago
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  Vixility

  I feel like this poem rings true and immediately enjoyed it. The line breaks after the ellipsis were well chosen (something free verse writers often seem to have difficulty with), and I like how the poet ties the end-rhyme of the first line (best) with the last word of the poem (unrest): a subtle but powerful way to conclude her piece.
  
  I also appreciate the poet's allusion to some of the most tragically important aspects of human existence: how true justice falls into the hands of a power-hungry collective which invariably results in unrest (my take on the poem's suggestion).
  
  As to the poem's brevity: who has the authority, really, to judge it as a viable piece or not? I would challenge anyone to begin by defining what poetry is first (and make no mistakes, that is not easy), and only then to critique the work above.
  
  Ezra Pound's short poem, "In a Station of the Metro", is highly recognized for its brevity, and is famous:
  
  "The apparition of these faces in the crowd:
  Petals on a wet, black bough."
  
  Condense the poem "Sometimes" into a similar couplet-like expression and tell me why it is less poetical:
  
  "Sometimes a shorter poem speaks best...
  on justice, power, and unrest."
  
  Yeah, this is a really good poem, and I salute the poet's creative perspective. more »

  LikeReply 18 months ago
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    Soulwriter

    thanks!

    LikeReply5 months ago
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  cokerrogers

  True

  LikeReply 211 months ago
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  dougb.19255

  Fewer the words. The more suggestive? Not.

  LikeReply11 months ago
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    Soulwriter

    ;)

    LikeReply5 months ago
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  dougb.19255

  Do not just title it. Detail it. Speak your heart. Sorry to say that I find Haiku-like poetry un-appealing. Might as well just have stayed home. Other entries from you do demonstrate how you do have the goods. Go back to that Charlotte. more »

  LikeReply 111 months ago
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  baways

  I agree

  LikeReply 111 months ago