Analysis of Holding My Breath



I feel like the three-legged dog at the park
When I don't have your leash on me
It's a little funny how I need you
So I can know who I should be

When you're gone I'm suffocating
When we talk I know I can breathe
I'm lost in a world that I created
But I don't think I want to leave

Maybe I should light some candles
It's getting darker everyday
And while it hurts to stay inside here
It's even worse when I go away

I don't know what to do anymore
I lose a little bit more each day
Only finding comfort in one part of this
But it doesn't last long anyway

And when I run out of breath down here
There won't be much left I can do
I'm sorry if I'm not strong enough
But I'm trying my best for you

(Written on May 4, 2011)

© Ricky Randall
September 1, 2012


Scheme XABA XXXX XCDC XCXC DBXB C XX
Poetic Form
Metre 11101101101 11111111 1010101111 11111111 1111100 11111111 1100111010 11111111 10111110 11010101 011111011 110111101 11111101 110101111 10101001111 11101110 011111111 11111111 110111101 11101111 1011 1010 010
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 729
Words 158
Sentences 1
Stanzas 7
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 1, 2
Lines Amount 23
Letters per line (avg) 25
Words per line (avg) 7
Letters per stanza (avg) 82
Words per stanza (avg) 23
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Modified on March 05, 2023

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