Analysis of Leaving



I can see you with my eyes.
As of now, you're in front of me
like I want you to be.
But the truth that I let my eyes in
is like the horizon
as it falls onto my shoulders.
You have to leave.
But, as long as you're in front of me
I can stab at bits of peace,
and grasp at air, to breathe.
But as the world starts to fall
like four walls surrounding me,
I feel too deep,
I think I have no escape from this fate,
from an echoing dark
that carves at my heart,
but once I get enough pieces so that I can breathe,
you have to leave.
We all have to go.
Next time I see you,
the ground will be laced with snow.
And I don't know what to do
because soon,
I'll be leaving, too.


Scheme abbcdeFbghibjklmhFnonopo
Poetic Form
Metre 1111111 11110111 111111 101111110 110010 11110110 1111 111110111 1111111 011111 1101111 1110101 1111 1111101111 111001 11111 1111011011111 1111 11111 11111 0111111 0111111 011 11101
Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 665
Words 161
Sentences 9
Stanzas 1
Stanza Lengths 24
Lines Amount 24
Letters per line (avg) 21
Words per line (avg) 6
Letters per stanza (avg) 496
Words per stanza (avg) 145

About this poem

My stepsister is leaving for college in a week. It's very sad. This isn't mostly about her or anything, it's about change, and growing up, I think.

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Written on August 13, 2023

Submitted by lorlor on August 13, 2023

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