Analysis of As if

As if? 1968 (Las Vegas, NV)



As if there were something between us
Not arising out of sleepless nights
Long Drives or Secret rendezvous

I dreamed I was combing your hair in the shower; It was so tangled as were you

As I attempted to unravel
Each hair became  a word for me to unravel

Then You turned to unwind my eyes
from all the pictures they held through the yrs

That you slipped between my fingers
Like dropped compassions

Twirling around my legs to disappear down the drain

I awoke distraught to a white ceiling sparkle
unable to go back to sleep

Simply Smiling wondering if somewhere
you were still in the shower.


Scheme AXB B CC XA XA X CX XX
Poetic Form
Metre 111010011 101011101 1111010 11111011001011110101 110101010 110101111010 11110111 1101011101 11101110 111 100111101101 101011011010 01011111 101010011 1010010
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 597
Words 115
Sentences 1
Stanzas 8
Stanza Lengths 3, 1, 2, 2, 2, 1, 2, 2
Lines Amount 15
Letters per line (avg) 32
Words per line (avg) 7
Letters per stanza (avg) 60
Words per stanza (avg) 14

About this poem

Written to my wife when we unfortunately separated. After our struggles were still together

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Written on August 15, 2013

Submitted by geoffnet2000 on September 05, 2021

Modified by geoffnet2000 on August 27, 2022

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Scott E Smith born July of 1968 1985-2003 Served approx: 18yrs of Military service: 82nd Airborne Division, 160th LRSD 40th ID, 1/184th 29th Inf Div. Graduated from University of Nevada Las Vegas 2010 Comprehensive Social Science Degree. My wife and I are still together after 17yrs. more…

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