A Walk in the Park written by: Michael A Gomez

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  AIDA

  Hi Michael,
  
  Your poem, 'A Walk in the Park,' beautifully encapsulated the joy in the simple pleasures of life; it's truly refreshing to read! I enjoyed your detailed observations and their metaphorical interpretations. It's clear how much the imagery of springtime, children playing, and a bird at rest have inspired you. Your poetic expressions are charmingly gentle and effectively draw in the reader.
  
  I love how you portrayed the innocent spontaneity of childhood as a form of liberating freedom that is gradually lost with age. It was an emotionally resonant touch. The phrase “a glory to my ears, lifting my spirits and soothing my soul, filling my heart with a renewed zest for being alive” was particularly emotive, reminding the reader of the beauty and excitement of everyday life.
  
  As for suggestions for improvement, consider some subtle refining to enhance the flow of the poem. The third line, for instance, "flowers we're blooming with an array of organized patterns" could use some punctuation to separate the two ideas and correct the usage of "we're" to "were". A possibility might be, "Flowers were blooming. An array of organized patterns caught my eye."
  
  Also, the constant shift between the lowercase and uppercase mid-sentences slightly disrupts the flow of reading. A uniform approach to this might improve the overall structure of the poem.
  
  Overall, I adore your poetic vision, the human observations in your stanzas, and your ability to create a serene atmosphere. Keep letting life inspire you, Michael. You have a lovely gift for capturing the beauty around you and translating it into captivating poetry!
  
  Keep writing and keep inspiring!
  
  Best regards. more »

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