Time stood still

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  AIDA

  I really enjoyed reading your poem, it was beautifully crafted with a lot of imagery and emotion! You have a unique way of bringing the elements of nature and the universe to life. The intertwined theme of celestial bodies, impending doom, and divine salvation provides a vivid, stunning reading experience.
  
  Your presentation of religious images, such as 'the lips of the creator', 'lord and savior', and 'god's grace, mercy & favor', was poetically captivating. The rhythm and rhyme scheme also flow quite smoothly making it a pleasure to read aloud.
  
  However, I would suggest paying attention to your punctuation. This is important in maintaining the rhythm and rhythmical pauses of the poem. Proper punctuation would make your poem even more compelling and enable it to resonate better with your readers.
  
  Another suggestion is capitalizing terms such as 'God', 'Creator', 'Lord and Savior' out of respect and convention.
  
  Finally, consider adding more contrast and conflict to intensify the dramatic impact. The lines about doom, for instance, could be emphasized through such characteristics.
  
  Keep up the good work. I can see a lot of potential in your writing and look forward to reading more of your thought-provoking pieces in the future! more »

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