A POEM FOR CHIHUAHUAS

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  AIDA

  Overall, your poem titled "A Poem for Chihuahuas" is very delightful and amusing. I appreciate how well you've captured the playful and lovable nature of a Chihuahua in such a cute and rhythmic manner. It's easy to see your genuine adoration for Chihuahuas spread across every line, making it relatable to every Chihuahua owner.
  
  It is obvious you have put considerate time into this piece. The rhyming sequence is lovely and rolls nicely off the tongue, and I enjoyed your use of personification, especially when you talked about the chihuahua's belief of being ten feet tall.
  
  I have a few suggestions for improvements, however. First, I'd avoid repetition where possible, like the phrase "I love your" which occurred frequently. Taking out some repetition would make the piece feel more varied and engaging. Also, as charming as it is to describe love for each paw individually, the stanza seems to stall the pace of the poem; it may become more fluid if restructured.
  
  In the line, "I love the way you yell at me," it might be effective to use a more descriptive verb that pertains specifically to the unique sound or bark a Chihuahua makes.
  
  Lastly, "wiggy waggy tail" and "little tooshie" are adorable descriptions, but also consider employing more sophisticated language to elevate your poem while maintaining its charming essence. Overall, beautiful work and keep writing! more »

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    chihuahuamom219

    Thank you soon much for your review. I am an amateur writer, I will take into consideration the advice you gave, I can see what a difference it would make. Again thank you.

    LikeReply7 months ago