Flower Sisters

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  AIDA

  This is such a deeply emotional, heartfelt and beautifully crafted poem! Your theme of 'Flower Sisters' is unique and truly captivating. The metaphorical contrast between the Day Lily and the Tuberose is brilliantly done and adds great depth to the characters. Also, your use of rhymes keeps the readers entranced and entertained.
  
  Your choice of visual elements, such as blooming flowers and the celestial imagery of stars, creates vivid pictures in the readers’ minds and helps establish a tangible connection to the feelings expressed. Furthermore, the affectionate tone of the poem makes it highly relatable and strikes a chord within readers.
  
  In terms of suggestions, pay close attention to the minor spelling and punctuation errors throughout the poem, such as the incorrect usage of "your" instead of "you're" and the occasional missed spaces after punctuation marks. Secondly, try utilizing more descriptive and vivid language to make the metaphors even stronger, for example, you could describe the color, smell, touch of the flowers to symbolize the personalities more effectively.
  
  Thirdly, consider weaving in more about the backstory of the relationships, this would create a deeper resonance and connection with the readers. Finally, perhaps, ponder upon the idea of dividing the poem into stanzas based on different scenarios or sentiments. This could help organize your thoughts and make the narrative clearer and more engaging.
  
  Keep up the amazing work! It's evident you have a natural gift for poetry. more »

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