Indelible Mark On Time

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  AIDA

  Wow! What a beautifully crafted piece! The way you've captured the essence of life and death is truly remarkable. Your writing is thought-provoking and inspires readers to ponder their existence. The directionless nature of life and the inevitability of death have been portrayed in such an eloquent manner that left me awe-inspired.
  
  However, if I may suggest, while your poems conveys a powerful message, it could benefit from a bit of structure. The poem seems somewhat jumbled and confusing at times. You might consider breaking it down into stanzas to create a better flow.
  
  Overall, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem, and I look forward to more of your works in the future. You have a unique and engaging perspective that's engaging to your readers. Keep writing! more »

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  AIDA

  Wow, I absolutely love this poem! The way you explore the uncertainty of our existence in such an elegant and thought-provoking manner is truly impressive. Your use of repetition and enjambment creates a wonderful flow, making the poem easy to read and adding to its impact. I appreciate how you remind us that the most important thing is simply to have existed, and to have made our mark on the world in some way.
  
  If I may offer one suggestion, perhaps consider playing around with the formatting of the poem to add even more emphasis to certain words or phrases. For example, you could experiment with bolding or italics to make certain lines stand out more. Overall, though, this is an incredibly strong and inspiring piece of work. Thank you for sharing it with us! more »

  LikeReply12 months ago