Analysis of (Don't) Look At The Sun

Ax.Barajas 1980 (Illinois)



Don't stay outside in the sun too long
 or you get burned. Says my mother.

Don't stare at the sun too long or you
 go blind. Says my father.

But, how can I go blind of the things I
 see before me. Staring at the sun's
 light being dragged by its vortex.

I can not look away like a mosquito to
 a flame. I can not turn away. Being
 consumed in the sun's glare. Look
 through the open portal in the sky.

A light so immaculate.
 The invisible man's shadow can be seen.
  See the eruption of the sun's core.

The undying red sea, The phoenixes lair,
 The red blooded dragons home that
 whips it's tail.

Don't look at the sun. I can not stray
 away. Colors dissolve, and fade away
 trees turn to black and white.

No difference, no shade. Traffic lights
 are more transparent.

Don't look at the sun but, see. All the
 wonders before me.

The undying star, The light of hope, The
fiery planet that burns the eternal flame.
Don't look at the sun I cannot blame.

The mystery the burns each day. I feel the warmth of the sun upon my face. Look at
the sun that sets on the west.

Where in the east is where it nests. To
light your way to your home at the end
of day. Each time you stare at that fiery orb.


Scheme XA BA CXX BXXC XXX XDX EEX XX FX FGG DX BXX
Poetic Form
Metre 111100111 11111110 111011111 111110 1111111011 101110101 11011110 111101100101 0111110110 0100111 101010001 0110100 0010011111 10101011 001011011 01101011 111 111011111 0110010101 111101 110011101 11010 111011110 10011 0010101110 100101100101 111011101 010001111101101011111 0111101 100111111 111111101 111111111001
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 1,280
Words 275
Sentences 31
Stanzas 12
Stanza Lengths 2, 2, 3, 4, 3, 3, 3, 2, 2, 3, 2, 3
Lines Amount 32
Letters per line (avg) 28
Words per line (avg) 7
Letters per stanza (avg) 75
Words per stanza (avg) 20

About this poem

I wrote this poem just the other day while riding my bike. Just a gorgeous sunny day. I remember something I used to do when I was a kid. Which was stare at the sun. Hope no one goes blind.

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Written on March 29, 2023

Submitted by axbarajas0419 on March 30, 2023

Modified on April 05, 2023

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