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Critique please ..

Brandon Rhodes

I wanna love like Johnny and June
They could sing they could carry a tune
Or like Guinevere and Lancelot
They were on fire man they were hot
Just like Mark and cleopat
I wanna love like that.

I wanna love you like there's no tomorrow
not a day not a breath to borrow
Through all the pain through all sorrow
That's where my hearts set
Like Romeo and Juliette
That's where it's at
I want a love like that
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Submitted on September 15, 2013

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Quick analysis:

Scheme AABBBC DDDEECC
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 390
Words 80
Stanzas 2
Stanza Lengths 6, 7
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