To the Mosquito

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  Symmetry60

  *Hand on bible* I swear that THIS poem was top two for me. I went back and forth, as many of us do, with this one and chose one other for a specific reason, which I iterated in the comment section of his poem when I voted. See if you can figure out the reason that I, "Steve," would have opted the way I did. Poem link I voted for below.
  
  February 17th, 2023/3rd Iteration by Steven Golden (poetry.com) more »

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    Symmetry60

    As for this particular poem - I'm convinced that you are incapable for writing bad poetry. This is a masterpiece. I thought, as I read it, that it might be yours what with the simplicity of the subject matter and the complexity and depth of thought with which it was composed. That your poetry is visually pleasing as well lends a professionalism few others incorporate.
    
    You are the one that makes others want to write better poetry. In fact, this poem is light years better than mine was. I'm simply trying to line my pockets with $$$ and so am trying to write more eye-to-eye in terms of what others might cling to in terms of relatability. That is the only reason my poem placed 3rd where yours should have probably been 1st or 2nd. You're too good and that terrifies some writers but makes me want to practice more. Hence, as I've realized since being a member that the best written pieces don't always make the grade as per cashola lest you be top 3 on the regular as per your God-given prowess. more »

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    Symmetry60

    What I voted for.
    
    I commemorate him here where he laysStilled, in a room apart from the wailingRuined, born under runes of misfortune.A bird from the sill alights into flight,While high in the blue bright, her winged kinCartwheel joyfully as his spirit joinsTheir swell, delaying Heaven for a day,Perhaps a night. Among the plebeiansHe sees a hapless “Steves,” his happinessUtterly forsaken, though he be not.If the ceiling be uncovered to sightA hovering Russ, the knots of sorrowIn his heart could be undone, utterly.A plot of grief should hold a hope like gold,Not ash, as if hope lie dashed. Sting these wordsInto the tombstones. Let them gleam, glisten.Listen to Steve sing, then dance your answer. more »

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    Vixility

    You, my friend, have made my day, week, month and year by this generous post of yours. I mean, wow!
    
    I was thrilled to the bones to see you placed! Same goes for Sue’s win as well. I feel I have many talented poets here on this platform that—on my side at least—I consider friends, and many more who I deeply admire and look forward to the seeing of their works. I feel as though my inspiration and new ideas comes from my reading the works of other poets—both here and abroad—and I feel challenged here. A good thing.
    
    I never, EVER feel offended if those who I admire or deem close to me vote for a poem other than mine, and I’m sure you feel the same way—although who’s gonna lie, winning a poetry contest isn’t exactly unpleasant.
    
    That said, you were right to vote for Steven Golden’s poem—a powerful piece—because it is the one that spoke to you.
    
    And about poets on this platform … you have got to be one of the most broad spectrum subject finders out of this whole group! It’s AWAYS exciting to see what SD comes up with. One can NEVER guess what angle you’re going to come from. You’re like an unpredictable kickboxer throwing left double jabs, shin to head kicks, and right left uppercuts all in a moment’s notice. That kind of writing adaptability—especially in poetry—is a virtue seldom seen in others, and one I wish I had.
    
    Again, I really appreciate you taking the time to leave those comments. And again, very excited for your win. more »

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    Symmetry60

    Here is the comment I left on his poem. You can see why I opted for the one I did. LoL -- "
    Beautiful writing. And that my name is used only makes the decision easier. Well done. ;-)"

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  acronimous

  My favorite of this month contest by all means, too polite in my opinion ;-)

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    Vixility

    Oh wow! Thank you. It was a fun poem to work on—plus, I didn’t think I would get much blowback from any mosquito rights organizations.

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    acronimous

    LOL!

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  npirandy

  This month had sooo many worthy entries that I found it difficult to choose just one. So I decided to vote for the most UNIQUE one of the bunch. This was too clever to pass up.

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    Vixility

    Thank you thank you for the vote!! I was definitely aiming for a subject that was a little ‘different’ so to speak. Fun poem to play with …

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    npirandy

    I absolutely knew you had written this one when I read it. I have grown to recognize your style, and I love it! Keep up the good work

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  susan.brumel

  Unusual subject matter, excellent rhythm and rhyme, efficiently written- and very relatable this week as I am in South Carolina battling the mosquito! Made me chuckle. Great job.

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    Vixility

    It made me chuckle when I read you chuckled lol … thank you for the vote. Congratulations on your well deserved win!

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    susan.brumel

    Thank you, my friend. :)

    LikeReply 111 days ago