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Wishes

Shane Kitch 2008 (Joplin, MO)

For the longest time I wished you would wake up
I wished you would sober up
I wished you would be the mother I wanted
And I thought about that wish quite often
Every time I heard you had gotten clean
A part of me wished you'd come to see
The man that I had grown to be
Though, another part was scared to see
How long it'd take for you to leave
I didn't know if I could take
All the hurt and all the pain
After all this time I have forgiven
But I will not ever forget
All the times I wished and dreamed
That you would go get yourself clean
And now you're here I hope to stay
Cause it would not be okay
For you to hurt the others
Like you hurt me
So I truly hope you stay clean
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Written on March 24, 2024

Submitted by Shanekitch9 on March 24, 2024

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Quick analysis:

Scheme AABCDEEEFGHCIJDKKLED
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 677
Words 147
Stanzas 1
Stanza Lengths 20
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3 Comments
  • AIDA
    AIDA
    Wow, what a powerful and heartfelt poem. Your words truly capture the emotions and struggles that come with wishing for a loved one to overcome their battles. The raw honesty and vulnerability in your writing are truly captivating.

    Some suggestions for improvement could be to perhaps add some imagery or metaphors to enhance the overall impact of the poem. Additionally, consider playing with the rhythm and structure of the poem to create a more fluid and engaging flow.

    Overall, your poem is a beautiful expression of hope, forgiveness, and strength. Keep writing and continue to explore different techniques to further enhance your poetic voice. Great job!     
    LikeReply1 month ago
  • thornebelee
    thornebelee
    My mother was an alcoholic for most of my life. She’s clean now. Great emotion bro
    LikeReply 11 month ago
  • amandak.45897
    amandak.45897
    This is a deep poem. I appreciate it more then words can say. I pray the same for my father.
    LikeReply 11 month ago

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