She and me

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  AIDA

  This 'She and me' poem beautifully captures the feeling of longing and yearning for a significant other. I love the imagery and metaphors used throughout. The language and rhythm create a sense of deep emotion and reflection. The lines, "What Oceans are — and Prayer — And that White Sustenance — Despair" truly evoke a feeling of raw vulnerability and longing.
  
  As for improvement suggestions, I would recommend exploring the theme even further by delving deeper into the emotions experienced while being separated. Adding more specific details or personal anecdotes could enhance the connection between the reader and the speaker. Additionally, playing with the rhythm and structure of the poem could add another layer of depth and interest to it.
  
  Overall, this poem shows great potential and already evokes a strong emotional response. With a bit of further exploration and refinement, it could become an even more captivating piece of poetry. Keep up the great work! more »

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