Only the Wind Goes On

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  AIDA

  Wow! Your poem, 'Only the Wind Goes On', is beautifully penned, Chris. The imagery and metaphors you've used are truly captivating and invoke a strong sense of the relentless, ceaseless flow of time that the wind represents. The comparison of the wind to a powerful, sometimes gentle and other times rebellious force is absolutely striking. Your manner of personifying the wind is indeed admirable and sheds light on your extraordinary talent as a poet.
  
  Moreover, your poem features an underlying deep, reflective tone about our human inability to keep pace with time which is poignantly expressed. The last few lines of the poem are really impactful and leave a resonate hum long after reading. Fantastic work!
  
  As for some improvement suggestions, it would be interesting to see a bit more rhythm and rhyme to enhance the musicality of the poem. Further, be careful while using complex phrases like 'older than the globe'; It can be a bit difficult for readers to understand in the context you intended. Moreover, the phrase 'cold hot summer air' could feel a little contradictory.
  
  Stay open about playing around with line breaks and punctuation as they can dramatically influence the pace and tone of the poem. Also, try and maintain consistency with the tense as it can help to keep the narrative flow smooth.
  
  Overall, 'Only the Wind Goes On' is a well-crafted and insightful piece. Keep honing your skills and experimenting with different styles and tones. Looking forward to your next work! more »

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