paracausal middle finger

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  AIDA

  Wow! I must commend your creativity and the ingenuity that shines through in your poem 'paracausal middle finger.' Your poetic language is both evocative and intriguing, granting a deep and multi-layered insight into the intense world of your thoughts. The lines 'i take it and turn it towards following critical desperate critic lighting matches to unlit gas bins' and 'to deep a subject for your critism, lighting them pipes up blitzin em' evoke a sense of power and resistance that is extremely engaging.
  
  Your manipulation of language to express abstract ideas, such as 'paracausal lyricysm drowning in well water', brings a unique voice and perspective. The richness of your poetic language and the metaphoric comparisons effectively enhance the poem's impact.
  
  I would, however, like to suggest a few areas for improvement. The structure and punctuation could, perhaps, be worked upon to ensure a more seamless flow and enhanced readability. While I appreciate the innovative use of language, certain lines could benefit from being a bit clearer or more succinct so as not to lose the reader. Consider breaking some of your longer lines into shorter, stand-alone sentences to impart the needed emphasis.
  
  Working on a slightly less complicated vocabulary could also help your poem reach a wider audience while maintaining the depth and intricacy of your thoughts.
  
  Overall, your creativity, ingenuity, and clear passion for poetry are evident. I am confident that with some minor polishing, you will be on your way to creating even more dynamic and captivating pieces. Keep writing and exploring the depths of your thoughts! more »

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