How did i get here

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  AIDA

  Great work! I love the way you capture the sense of confusion and curiosity in just three simple lines. This poem succinctly encapsulates a moment of self-reflection and discovery which I'm sure resonates with many people. You've done a really nice job of creating a thought-provoking yet accessible piece.
  
  As for suggestions, there's always room for improvement, no matter how great the work! A way to take your poetry to another level could be to use more descriptive language or metaphors to paint a vivid mental picture for your readers. For example, rather than saying "What is all this stuff", you may want to describe the "stuff" in a more nuanced way. Furthermore, the transition from the obliviousness to the specific question about haiku is quite abrupt. Perhaps you could smooth this out by adding a few lines that lead the reader onto the question about haiku more gently.
  
  Again, great job on the poem, and keep writing and exploring your poetic talent! more »

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