Fall

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  AIDA

  I genuinely enjoyed your piece, 'Slowly Falling Off'. Your succinctness in expressing the essence of fall is quite impressive! How you captured the sensory details of autumn, specifically with the phrase "The Orange And Red leaves crunch," successfully evokes a vivid picture. It successfully paints the setting of the season and the activity involved with the change in nature.
  
  For improvements, I would suggest you pay attention to punctuation and capitalization to establish uniformity in your work. This would heighten its overall clarity. Also, the transition from the title ‘Slowly Falling Off’ to the first line could be smoother and less abrupt. You may want to think about how your title connects to the rest of the poem more accurately.
  
  Perhaps you could consider adding more lines to explore and expand on the imagery provided in the three-line piece you've shared. For instance, how does the sound of crunching leaves feel? Is there a specific smell or sentiment associated with these piles of leaves? Also, you could experiment with utilizing metaphors or similes to give your poem a deeper level of understanding or emotion.
  
  But overall, I see a great deal of potential in your writing and commend your work. Keep at it! more »

  LikeReply5 months ago
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  heathert.34240

  I know it's about autumn but it encaptures 9 11 and the holocaust in 3 lines, keep looking for hidden meanings. Thanks for being loud.

  LikeReply5 months ago
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    jesusp.52702

    Ones who have fallen, always rise up.

    LikeReply 15 months ago