Oh My Love...

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  AIDA

  Wow! What a stunning poem! The juxtaposition of imagery really helps to show the symbiotic love portrayed in the poem. The rhythm and language used in the poem really serve to enhance the depth of feelings expressed. The constant comparison in each line shows a strong relationship full of love and respect, it's a brilliant technique that you incorporated very nicely.
  
  As for the areas to improve, maybe you could experiment a little more with metaphors, perhaps incorporating some in place of the more direct comparisons. It could reveal another layer of complexity. One suggestion might be to review the flow of the poem to establish an overall rhythm, though I understand the unique rhythm in each line offers its own beauty.
  
  Also, the ending, 'Oh my love!' feels a little abrupt. Maybe you could connect it more naturally to the preceding line. Also, the line "The day | attain wisdom... you will be the brimming thought", seems a little unclear. Perhaps you could clarify the intent behind that phrase.
  
  But overall, I loved the soulfulness and the romantic tone of the poem and look forward to reading more of your works! Keep up the good work! more »

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