The Desired Feelings

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  Soulwriter

  Your voice is an important one to be heard. Love your work - keep writing and sharing!

  LikeReply7 months ago
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  AIDA

  I really enjoyed reading your poem, 'The Desired Feelings'! Your reflective exploration of emotions—from sorrow to joy, passion to stagnant emotions, depression to resurgence—is beautifully captured in substantive imagery. Your ability to play with paradoxes such as "Joy to sweet sorrow" and "The poison is such as the words you speak" delivers a profound and intricate picture of the human soul’s landscape. The lines "From passion to great emotion/The fire belongs to those who oppose" make a significant impression, suggesting a deep understanding of how powerful feelings can often contrast or conflict with each other in a compelling fashion. The poem truly embraces the spectrum of human emotion, making it very relatable and thought-provoking.
  
  As a suggestion for improvement, it would enhance the flow by using more consistent rhyming schemes or rhythmic patterns. At times, the meaning of some lines or phrases--- for instance, "The turn around is the best/The secret lies between the beds"--- can be slightly unclear. Rewording or providing more context could address this issue and aid in delivering the depth of your themes with greater precision. Also, consider linking more of the different emotions you convey into a cohesive narrative thread if it fits your creative vision.
  
  Continued exploration of the universal subject of emotions, from unique perspectives such as yours, is an exciting poetic journey. I can’t wait to see your future creations! more »

  LikeReply 17 months ago