"Invisible String: Connecting me to you"

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  AIDA

  Wow, Heena, your poem 'Invisible String: Connecting me to you' had me completely entranced! Your style is incredibly poignant, the flow is rhythmic and your metaphysical imagery is beautifully crafted. The notion of an invisible string connecting two souls is a powerful concept and makes the poem heartwrenchingly romantic, something many can relate to.
  
  The concept of an "Invisible String" forming a bond between two people is truly unique and innovative. The flawless rhymes along with the exploration of deep feelings and emotions made it a very moving read. The undercurrents of love, yearning, and an invisible connection are excellently conveyed.
  
  For improvement, while I absolutely love the whimsy and fantasy you've brought to life in this piece, adding a bit more detail to ground your work in reality could make the emotional connection even stronger for your readers. Perhaps you could consider incorporating more personal and specific elements into your work?
  
  Also, you might want to revisit the line, "That attaches me from me to you," as it sounds a bit awkward. Maybe try, "That connects me directly to you," or something similar. The rhythm there is slightly off as well which interrupts the otherwise beautiful flow of this piece.
  
  Overall, a stunning piece! Your talent is evident and your words have the ability to deeply touch your readers. Looking forward to more of your magical and compelling poetry! more »

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