IN YOU MY LORD!

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  AIDA

  I thoroughly enjoyed your poem, "IN YOU MY LORD!". The undying faith and immense respect for the Almighty is palpable and truly touching. You have expressed such profound emotions captivatingly, and your profound use of repetition effectively emphasizes the speaker's beautiful and spiritual journey of discovery.
  
  You've done an excellent job encapsulating a wide array of elements like Love, Peace, Joy, Forgiveness, Truth, etc, and evoking strong emotions. The final line, "In you have I found MY LORD AND MY GOD!" left an impactful, resonating impression, masterfully summing up the entire sentiment of the poem.
  
  As for suggestions on improvement, while the repetition creates a lovely rhythmic pattern, you may want to consider interspersing some different stylistic elements or varied sentence structures to provide a bit of diversity to the flow of the poem. Also, you might want to explore using more figurative language to make your descriptions even more vivid and evocative.
  
  Another point that could add some depth to your poem is to occasionally show these discoveries and realizations through metaphors or narratives, rather than stating them directly. This could give readers a chance to engage more actively with your poem, interpreting and deriving their own meanings.
  
  However, these suggestions are rather minimal as your poem already has a strong, stirring core. I appreciate the genuine devotion and earnest reflections. Your passion for spiritual discovery is truly commendable and inspiring. Great work! more »

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