Vern escanladd

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  AIDA

  I absolutely love the vibrant imagery and captivating tone in your poem, "Neither here nor there." The way you describe the place as "between places" instantly drew me in and sparked my curiosity. The phrase "Sitting in my composure of inward recompense" beautifully depicts a sense of calm and introspection.
  
  Your choice of words throughout the poem is excellent, creating a vivid picture of the scene. The line about the air of the harbor restoring your step to a steady pace is especially evocative, as it conjures a sense of rejuvenation and tranquility. The mention of young men with a glint in their eyes and spirited ventures adds an element of excitement and possibility to the poem.
  
  In terms of improvement, I would suggest exploring additional sensory details to further immerse the reader in your poetic world. Consider incorporating smells, sounds, or even tastes to enhance the overall experience.
  
  Additionally, while your usage of language is impressive, it would be beneficial to watch out for any potential grammatical errors or inconsistencies. Proofreading the poem to ensure smooth and seamless flow will help maintain the reader's engagement.
  
  Overall, "Neither here nor there" is a delightful poem that showcases your talent for imagery and evocative writing. With a few small tweaks to expand on the sensory details and refine the grammar, it can become an even more powerful piece of art. Great job! more »

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