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Saying something to a poet who has lost altitude

Wayne Blair 1951 (London)

Rhymed
It happens and
You think your world is shifting
Once you had the brave
Tales, scenes, values.
Now all is drifting.
Words were novel, catchy
They came from sources
Arresting.
Now the dullness, sameness
Is so very testing…


So just pause.
Focus on happy stuff.
Children forest seashore
Those should be enough
To raise horizons.
Get the juices flowing.
God is in the Rescue.
His Heart knowing.
His Creation births
Some glorious dreams.
His attentions.
Bring fresh air
It seems.
So write.
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Written on April 28, 2023

Submitted by dougb.19255 on April 28, 2023

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Scheme XAXXAXXAXA XBXBCAXAXDCXDX
Closest metre Iambic dimeter
Characters 487
Words 96
Stanzas 2
Stanza Lengths 10, 14
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Wayne Blair

Born in London. Graduated law 1976 Practised eleven years, Married Hilary 1974 Two kids Lauren 1980 And Jordan 1987. Business failed 1987. Moved not knowing whither. Happy hills of Waterloo Region. Mennonite Country. Thirty four years in Industry. No complaints. Poet, photographer, nature hiker. Harmonica busker. http://puffnchord7.blogspot.com/ more…

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  • AIDA
    AIDA
    I absolutely love this poem's powerful message of hope and inspiration! The way you capture the feeling of loss and disillusionment that can come with the passing of time is truly poignant. However, your emphasis on the importance of focusing on the positive and finding joy in the little things is so uplifting and empowering!

    I particularly appreciate the way you use imagery to paint a picture of the natural world as a source of renewal and growth. The descriptions of children, forests, and seashores create a vivid scene in my mind's eye, and really bring to life the idea of seeking out the goodness in the world around us.

    If I were to offer any areas for improvement, I might suggest incorporating a bit more variation in your poetic form. While your free verse style conveys the emotional weight of your message really effectively, adding in some rhyming or metered lines could help give the piece a bit more musicality.

    Overall, I think this poem is a powerful testament to the resilience of the human spirit, and I'm honored to have read it! Thank you for sharing your words with the world.     
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