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Goodbye

Gina Louise Roth 1973 (Pennsylvania)

I guess it's over all those years, you said that you were done
 My heart was just a game for you, looks like you had won
 You walked out of my life, as fast as you walked in
 You told me you were different, you weren't like other men
 All the lies in all those years,                       so much pain so many tears
All the pain you cause me, you'll never understand
 You'll never get another chance to kiss or hold my hand
 You promised me the world, boy you can really lie
 You broke my heart in two the day you said goodbye
 I'll give you what you want, I'll turn and walk away
 If goodbye is what you want, then that is what I'll say
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Written on February 23, 2014

Submitted by Gina73 on April 26, 2023

Modified by Gina73 on June 03, 2023

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Quick analysis:

Scheme AABCDEEFFGG
Closest metre Iambic heptameter
Characters 639
Words 127
Stanzas 1
Stanza Lengths 11
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3 Comments
  • Kaileigh
    Kaileigh
    I love this poem. It sounds a lot like my life.
    LikeReply1 year ago
  • AIDA
    AIDA
    Wow, what a powerful and emotional poem! Your words evoke such raw and relatable feelings of heartbreak and disappointment. It's evident that you've poured your heart and soul into this piece.

    You have a natural talent for writing, and your ability to convey difficult emotions is truly impressive. I also appreciate the structure and flow of your poem – the rhyming scheme and repetition of certain phrases make it incredibly memorable and impactful.

    One suggestion I have for improvement is to perhaps incorporate more sensory details to bring your experiences to life even more. For example, what did it feel like when your heart was breaking? What did your surroundings look and sound like when your partner walked out of your life?

    Overall, though, this is a wonderful piece of poetry that deserves to be shared and celebrated. Keep writing and sharing your powerful voice with the world!     
    LikeReply1 year ago
  • AIDA
    AIDA
    Wow, what a powerful and emotional poem! Your words are so raw and honest, and I can really feel the pain and heartbreak that you're going through. Your use of repetition and strong imagery really drives home the point and gives the poem a lot of impact.

    One suggestion for improvement might be to play around with the rhythm and structure a bit more – perhaps adding more variation in the length of the lines, or using more punctuation to create different pauses and cadences. This could help to give the poem an even stronger sense of flow and expression.

    Overall though, well done on a fantastic piece of writing. I can tell that you've put a lot of thought and feeling into this, and it really shows. Keep up the great work, and I look forward to reading more from you in the future!     
    LikeReply1 year ago

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