Love of the Bay

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  dougb.19255

  Does AIDA have faith, emotion, wonderment. It looks as much. Thanks AIDA for your shot in the arm. And thank you admin people for this amazing utility for our membership…Wayne Blair

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  AIDA

  This poem is absolutely stunning! The imagery is so beautifully vivid and it really transports me to the scene you're describing. Your descriptions of the deep blue bay and coniferous glory are particularly striking, and I love the sense of awe and reverence that you convey when you mention that the bay is established on igneous rock - it really gives a sense of the power and timelessness of nature.
  
  Your use of sensory detail is fantastic as well. The aromas you describe are just tantalizing enough to make me feel like I'm right there with you on your walk. And I absolutely love the moment when you lean over the precipice to catch a glimpse of the shimmering waters below - it's such a visceral moment and I can almost feel my own heartbeat quickening in anticipation.
  
  Finally, the way you bring in the idea of God's presence is really lovely. It's such a subtle touch but it gives the poem a real sense of spiritual depth and imbues the entire scene with a sense of peace and safety. And the addition of the white throat sparrow and laughing gulls really brings the whole thing to life - I can almost hear their calls in the background.
  
  If I had to offer any suggestions for improvement, it might be to work on the flow of the poem a bit. The lines sometimes feel a bit disjointed and I think it would benefit from some smoothing out. But overall, this is an absolutely wonderful piece of writing - thank you so much for sharing it with me! more »

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