OPEN THE BOX



Here I am in a square box; I am so scared  I am looking for a way out. All I can do is walk about. Why can't someone come and save me? I no longer want to be here. I see people laughing and playing Mama. Why cannot they be there? I want you to be with me; if you come down in the box, I know you wouldn't mean to, but you might take up all the steal air that I find myself trying so hard to breathe.

Open up this damn box! He says let us have some patience. How can you have patience when you no longer have a mind? Open up this fucking box. Do not tell me you can not open it, for it has no locks; I want the hell out of this box; I want to walk to my sweet love and talk. I would do what I have to just to be alive again.

I will do anything to remove the pain of those who knew me. If you will not open the box for me, then please will you open it for them so that they can see me whole again? I want to be in my warm bed and live in my home again, not this dirt-covered field.

In this life I have now, I see people that I knew from a long time ago, but the people that I left behind, oh, what  I would not do to see them one more time so I  can in this afterlife carry a picture of them in my newfound mind. Open the box! Open the box! It is such a scary feeling when you see family and friends, especially your parents and grandparents putting flowers and teddy bears on your new home, a square wooden box. Your death, not even yourself comprehends,

I am now walking around heaven 24/7 on Earth. I so desperately want to be. I like a grieving mother of mine to have a rebirth. I want a new start. I hate seeing my beautiful mother with a broken heart.

Open the box; I want to breathe something fresh like air, voices I want to hear, people I want to see, whole I want to be. I want to get married and raise a family. God let me awake from this slumber so I could run to my mother like I did when I was a child hell, I know now that I should not have been racing. I am only 19. Open the box so my mother can hold her baby boy again, and my little brother can return his best friend. Please, God, I hate to beg but open the box!

About this poem

I wrote this poem when I was 15 years old after my older brother died in a car accident so it is in his memory

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Written on February 07, 1990

Submitted by Oakley on November 13, 2022

Modified by Oakley on April 16, 2023

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Stanzas 6
Stanza Lengths 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1

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  • dougb.19255
    https://www.poetry.com/poem/154890/the-everlasting-mercy#comment-115973 Today a derivation of Masefield. Mrveled at his stamina and brilliance. Long satisfying story.
    LikeReply1 year ago
  • dougb.19255
    I must prod you to read some of the verse stories of Englishman John Masefield. Sea Lover. Writer of redemptive beauty and fresh chances (The Everlasting Mercy). Good Friday narrative…
    LikeReply1 year ago
  • dougb.19255
    The box: separation, death, imagined confinement and failures. Why no access to Mother or brother? God must open the box. Yeah probably, narrative of one dead. Literally? Figuratively? Impactful stuff hippie…Wayne Blair. 
    LikeReply1 year ago
  • dougb.19255
    This is six stanzas.
    I will not bother with anything longer. And I grow older and testy with endless stream of consciousness. The mastery of poetry is so often concise bull’s eye wording and images and slight surprises…Unless one has the gumption to try long narrative poems. Longfellow, Masefield. Tennyson. Coleridge. 
    LikeReply 11 year ago
  • Oceanloveisland
    I am a mother, so when reading your peice I could imagine my son saying the same things. I can’t stop tearing up. I send warmth and love to you and your family.
    LikeReply1 year ago
    • Oakley
      thanks i need to get both of them some votes
      LikeReply1 year ago
  • Teril
    This is so sad. He was so young! Your expression of your loss is vivid, beautiful.
    LikeReply1 year ago
    • Oakley
      thanks again for your support he would have been 52 years old on 1/21 he died 19 days after his 19th bday
      LikeReply1 year ago

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