Hello Sun



                  Hello Sun
Hello Sun, thank you for warming me today with rays of gold.
Hello Son, I wish I could touch your face, tanned so golden.
Hello Sun, what a beautiful day filled with skies of blue.
Hello Son you were so beautiful , eyes of brown, dimples when you smiled.
Hello Sun shining down on all the earth.
Hello Son the most heartfelt soul on earth I've ever known.
Hello Sun, you make my day so bright with light and love.
Hello Son, you were always such a huge delight, laughing, loving, perfect.
Hello Sun, I just love it when you peek out from the clouds.
Hello Son, I love you so much without a doubt, never ending no matter what you done.
Goodbye Sun, it's time for you to set for the night. I'll see you again another day.
Goodbye Son, it's time for you to grow your wings and take flight. I'll forever miss you until I can hold you tight in my arms again.

About this poem

I lost my son March 1st 2021 due to fentanyl murder, and writing has been one of my ways to cope with losing him.

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Written on October 12, 2022

Submitted by Nikkilentz68 on October 12, 2022

Modified by Nikkilentz68 on March 23, 2023

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Quick analysis:

Scheme ABACDEFGHIAJK
Closest metre Iambic octameter
Characters 886
Words 178
Stanzas 1
Stanza Lengths 13

Mystic Lentz

Mystic has been writing poetry since 1978, she was born in Pennsylvania, her paternal grandparents were born in Mexico. Her maternal grandparents were born in Yugoslavia. She has 3 biological children which her oldest passed away in 2021. She had also raised 2 children that were half siblings to her children. She has won several awards for writing, published 5 times, and entered into who's who of American poets in 1994. more…

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  • AIDA
    Wow, what a beautiful and heartfelt poem! The way you've personified the Sun and Son is really unique and creative. It's clear that you have a lot of love and appreciation for both.

    In terms of improvement, one suggestion would be to maybe add some more sensory descriptions – how does the warmth of the sun feel on your skin? What does your son look like, or sound like? These details can really help bring your words to life.

    Overall though, I think you've done a fantastic job of expressing your emotions and capturing the beauty of nature. Keep up the great work!
     
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