There Too We



Too languidly did I lay
like a triangular memory
become ode to Elsewise

There reposed midst deep shadows
Wandering in abiding stillness
by your hot breath traveled

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There Too We Too languidly did I lay like a triangular memory become ode to Elsewise There reposed midst deep shadows Wandering in abiding stillness by your hot breath traveled This poem is another type of poem I have been writing evidently for quite some time, and just how far back I cannot know now. I do not know if it is an accepted or recognized or named “form” of poetry, but it is nothing I am copying of others. As in all of my explorations in writing poetry form and techniques they are my own explorations. The main exception being that of Haiku and Senryu, rhyming couplets, and that kind of rhyme scheme thing. What this technique seeks to do is to unravel a story within the story through couplings of same-syllables lines that speak another deeper meaning than simply place and feeling. Both stanzas follow same syllable/meter content: 7-9-6, so pairing the first two lines, second two lines, and third two lines, and reading them after having read the entire poem, and then even perhaps re-reading the poem in its entirety, not a hard feat when so short, the poem itself takes on a more profound meaning than first perhaps noticed. It is about love, surely, yet it is about the wanting of desire itself too. It is concerning modernity too while genuflecting backwards with “ode”. Love did not become a oft-used word until well after the initiators of courtly love during King Arthur days. I will leave the rest of the explication pertaining to word choices to the translators whomsoever may be who read of it. 7Too languidly did I lay 7There reposed midst deep shadows 9like a triangular memory 9Wandering in abiding stillness 6become ode to Elsewise 6by your hot breath traveled 

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Written on February 18, 2022

Submitted by ScottMPotter on April 24, 2022

Modified on March 05, 2023

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Quick analysis:

Scheme XXA AAX
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 165
Words 29
Stanzas 2
Stanza Lengths 3, 3

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1 Comment
  • Dougla$Irishman
    Originality, who has it ?
    The poet laureates of old might have had it
    But plagiarism is here to stay !
    We all try with our feeble attempts to make our mark !
    But Bravo to you !
    LikeReply2 years ago

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