Analysis of The winter between us



With cold wet rain the sky pelted the earth,
the slippery patch of grass warns against tresspass
the weather imposed its walls between us,
even as we reach out with words our breaths
fogs and blurs the face of the other,
with submissive haste …..we walked on…….
aware of nothing more than the chill and our lives.

The homeless man on the corner shook his cup
with imploring look in his eyes, yearning for alms
from passers by hoping we drop a coin or two.
He gets only our perfunctory glances
then avoiding his space and his gaze ….we moved on….
our minds were tackling the chill and our lives.

The brass quartet dressed in season’s red
played songs of love and redemption
they set cadence for shoppers flowing thru the mall.
The four did well to beat the cold and the snow
they could have chosen to lounge cozily
where they work at The Wall ….we should have known….
But our souls carry lots of chills and less of our lives.


Scheme XAAAXBA XAXABA XXCXCXA
Poetic Form Tetractys  (20%)
Metre 1111011001 01001111011 0100111011 10111111101 101011010 10101111 0111011010101 01011010111 101010111011 110110110111 111010010010 101011011111 101010010101 010110101 11110010 111011010101 01111101001 11110111 1111011111 110110111011101
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 931
Words 175
Sentences 11
Stanzas 3
Stanza Lengths 7, 6, 7
Lines Amount 20
Letters per line (avg) 36
Words per line (avg) 9
Letters per stanza (avg) 243
Words per stanza (avg) 57
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Submitted by S07R06Enopena53 on April 26, 2021

Modified on March 05, 2023

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