Analysis of The Obedience



The only mistake he made
Like shattering glass flying fast
Into a million pieces like me,
And you would too, if a nest had been made
Inside yourself, as my soul's abode;
I was told to not speak of such things
To abide, keep quiet, and hide the truth,
And you would too because shame shuts your mouth
The first moment he gives you slight pleasure;
Now I digress, my broken nest,
With twigs still strategically twisted
And interwined with fear I find
Deceit, simple as a sparrow;
And you would too, if obedience put you
Laden on your back with his betrayal.


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Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 541
Words 103
Sentences 1
Stanzas 1
Stanza Lengths 15
Lines Amount 15
Letters per line (avg) 29
Words per line (avg) 7
Letters per stanza (avg) 438
Words per stanza (avg) 103
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Submitted on May 01, 2011

Modified on March 05, 2023

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Christine Elaine Gwaltney

Born 11/28/1966 Passaic, NJI grew up in a small town northeastern PA. Poetry is my first love. I am inspired by Keats, Shelley, Wordsworth, Donne. I feel misplaced in this time. I long for the 1800's. I hope you enjoy my poetry as much as I do. Much of what I say is mostly unspoken.... more…

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