Analysis of The unfinished story of a woman and her pram

Phillip James Dewey 2002 (Doncaster)



A mother walks her pram
Bound in warm black layers of polyester coat
Struggling up the mud path
In the middle of nowhere.

At least i assume she's the mother
How am i to know from the window of the train
In fact the pram may be empty
The emotional weight of a broken childhood.

Perhaps this darkly coloured pram is a meer projection
Of a child running from dysfunctionallity.
The bird cage with the brass lock.

A mother of sympathetic mahogany
Marred with many rings of experience
Disconnecting her from the plasticine palace of her daughters ambition.

The gluttonous green grass
Defying the harbinger clouds threatening release
Ah yes release!

Her face is veiled by a thick arch of hueless fur
I imagine chemtrails spoiling her perfect pale cheeks
Dried streaks of raw recently released emotion.

The road to nowhere
Destination? unnecessary
Purpose unclear
Motivation, known


Scheme XAXB CXDX EAX DXE XFF CXE BDXX
Poetic Form
Metre 010101 1011101101 1001011 001011 111011010 111111010101 01011110 00100110101 011101011010010 1011011 0111011 01010100100 1110110100 01001010101010010 010011 0100100110001 1101 01111011111 101011000111 111110001010 0111 0100100 1001 0101
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 891
Words 171
Sentences 9
Stanzas 7
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 3, 3, 3, 3, 4
Lines Amount 24
Letters per line (avg) 30
Words per line (avg) 6
Letters per stanza (avg) 103
Words per stanza (avg) 21

About this poem

A scene witnessed through the window of the RE 3 to Dresden.

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Written on November 15, 2023

Submitted by Phillipjdewey on December 09, 2023

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