Analysis of Elegy of a Mother's Silent Departure



In the shadows of despair, my heart does weep,
A tale of anguish, in the depths so deep.
I pen this verse, a heavy burden to bear,
Of losing my mother to life's cruel snare.

Her laughter once danced like a gentle breeze,
But now it's silenced by a soul's unease.
In the darkest night, her spirit took flight,
Leaving me behind in this endless night.

The pain, a tempest, a storm that won't subside,
I search for solace, in tears I confide.
Why did you leave, oh dearest mother mine?
In the wake of your absence, I'm left to pine.

The questions haunt me, they tear at my soul,
What drove you to this, what was your toll?
Did you feel alone in the depths of despair?
I wish I'd known, I wish I'd been aware.

Your smile, your touch, forever out of reach,
In the caverns of my heart, your memory I beseech.
The void you left, a chasm, a gaping hole,
My grief, a river, an eternal, restless toll.

Each day is a struggle, each night a pain,
Without you, dear mother, it's all in vain.
I long to hear your voice, to see your face,
But all that remains is an empty space.

Yet, in the darkness, a flicker of light,
A memory of your love, burning so bright.
I'll hold onto that, through the tears and the strife,
And cherish the moments that made up your life.

Though you've departed, your love will endure,
In the memories we shared, in moments so pure.
You'll forever be missed, forever be dear,
In my heart, in my soul, you'll always be near.

In this heart-wrenching journey, I'll find my way,
To honor your memory, to see the light of day.
Through the pain and sorrow, I'll learn to survive,
And keep your love and spirit, forever alive.


Scheme AABB CCDD EEFF GGBB HHGG IIJJ DDKK LLMM NNOO
Poetic Form Quatrain 
Metre 0011011111 0111000111 11110101011 11011011101 0101110101 1111010101 0010101011 1010101101 01010011101 1111001101 1111110101 00111101111 0101111111 111111111 11101001101 1111111101 1111010111 00101111100101 01110100101 110101010101 1110101101 0111101101 1111111111 1110111101 1001001011 01001111011 11101101001 01001011111 1101011101 001001101011 10101101011 0110111111 01110101111 1101100110111 10101011101 011101001001
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 1,639
Words 353
Sentences 20
Stanzas 9
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4
Lines Amount 36
Letters per line (avg) 34
Words per line (avg) 9
Letters per stanza (avg) 137
Words per stanza (avg) 34

About this poem

My mother committed suicide when I was 10, writing helped me through it. This poem I wrote is how I feel about the whole situation.

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Written on September 09, 2023

Submitted by Tealkid31 on September 09, 2023

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