Analysis of Lily's Remedy

Caz 1980 (Edinburgh)



I'm sat it's 3 am I'm desperate,  I need a remedy.
Not just for routine but I'm dissing my self and my own memory.  
There's a time when we will cure mental health,
Not a prevention or preclusion but a potion on the shelf.

Feeling like there's a devil dancing with your brain
Telling you to fill the knowledge to the brim.
Then Satan warning you, your hollow after all your work
Then leaving you alone with your halo in the dark.

When it started out it was such a trend
Bending over backwards appreciation towards the Eminem.  
Lying on a sofa for days at a time
When it's cold and dark and your counting time.

There's nothing worse than the motion in your brain
Shifting the thoughts around just to numb the pain.
Then you go out and it's like being buried alive
When all your days have been traded for the night.

It's not being bothered about hygiene
Or cleanliness or playing the biggest queen
It's getting back to an even level
Heaven still wants you, but your playing with the devil.

Then trying to keep your dignity whilst fighting the fear
All these voices going on in my ear
There's police asking questions,  nurses asking why
But my mental health is caving, and I'm starting to cry.


Scheme AAXX BCXX XCDD BBXX EEFF XXGG
Poetic Form
Metre 1111110110100 11101111011011100 1011111101 1001010101010101 101101010111 10111010101 11010111010111 1101011110001 1110111101 10101000100101 10101011101 1110101101 11011010011 10010111101 1111011101001 11111110101 111010011 11001100101 1101111010 1011111101010 11011110011001 1110101011 101101010101 11101110011011
Closest metre Iambic hexameter
Characters 1,206
Words 238
Sentences 12
Stanzas 6
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4
Lines Amount 24
Letters per line (avg) 39
Words per line (avg) 9
Letters per stanza (avg) 156
Words per stanza (avg) 37

About this poem

This poem is about living with a mental health condition.

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Written on January 01, 2021

Submitted by Cjmason on July 08, 2023

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