Analysis of Daylight Fantasy



The wind calls for us to compromise,
but the innocent must stand still in the storm:
pierced,
to guard the only shelter of the minds.  

Owls penetrate the melting night,
echoing sounds of inquiry.
Night glistens in firing flames
to the dedicated, the fate.

It was the phantom that leaks through the overarching sky:
glasses glisten in pieces of choice - hidden, ungranted-
igniting rules and broken promises.

So fragile the starry night of dreams:
glistening so faint where the innocent rested.
Scraped with hoes so sharp,
eyes worn with tears –
streaming down the glaring gaze.  

The child seized the shattered pieces,
fingers brushing fragmented puzzle.
In blurry eyes trying to ramble in place
and glue the sky in rubber-colored ink.  

But they were told to comply:
to follow the experienced and right.
“For growth”, they say, “and for success.”  

Again, nights are shattered in shimmering fantasies,
tearing boundless inquiries and attempts -  
they finally dissipate upon the first streak of dusk
in sunrise to reborn in maturing flames.  

The fire burns through the barren lands,
engulfing of the lake of eyes so large.
In it encloses a fate
finally drown through lightening and pain -  
innocent eyes lost to darkness of the night.  

How long have we set aside these childish dreams -  
to enclose our eyes in a glaring glaze
and peer through the piercing flames
as we tug on the threaded “should”?  

Though childish it seems,
inverted in eyes of the innocent,
where can we find our treasures once more?

NO, we DON’T know.

But the child knows it is time to come:
to rebirth as the daylight strikes.

Trembling hands thread through the pieces,
needles falling and picked.
Stars knit the constellation
into a glass glistening through accentuating lights.  

The lost wash their faces in shattered glass,
hands torn, wounded,  
scarlet flow in streams of tears.
Overhead the glaze lost to dreary dusk.  

Once more, in the undulating rhythms the thunders span,
gripping one's nerve to tighten and stretch.
Glances through dusts lick the gloomy clouds
to clear the night,
and let stella be heard:
"Embrace the night;
LET GO the flames”.  

But “No, no,” the child would say, closing the eyes,
“Rebirthing in light,
we need its flames
to GUIDE us in should,
to enlighten us in world”.  

But is rebirth truly an alarm
or the lullaby to a deeper sleep?
How much do us dwell upon the lightning of the day
to not be DROWNED in glazing flames?

Let us reopen our eyes to hear sounds of the night
once again filled by owls who warn.
Calls pierce our eyes;
we wake as inflammation stings.  

Where can we find our consciousness long lost
through streams of the so-called growth -
embedded in instillation of thoughts,
dissipating away into the dusk?

Some do break the shattered frames
to stretch out and connect the constellation.
They dwell on one to ignite:
through the dark a real spark of passionate joys.

But many birds awake yet with their eyes pressed,
lost in projections they shall follow.
A dead fish floats in air,
its eyes white, drifting up the waterfilled mist,
locked in an everlasting sleep.  

Though calls will come centuries later -
cracking, seeps through the ground.
Streams drip onto the torn forehead,
and slide
down the youth now frozen smooth.  

Snow owls sing the passing of the night,
time brushed and buried in ice.
“You cannot go back,” they hiss.

Yet underground eyes let thaw long-lost fantasies
for memoirs to be seen:  notes damp in streaming brooks, words floating, roaring by.  Trickling in thunders woke the one.
Reawaking the daylight comes: Owls quack.
Fantasies revisited;
A warm embrace.


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Poetic Form
Metre 01111110 10100111001 1 1101010101 1100101 10011010 110101 10100001 1101011101001 101001011101 0101010100 110010111 100111010010 11111 1111 1010101 01101010 101010010 01011011001 0101010101 1101101 1100010001 11110101 0111100100100 10100100001 1100100101111 0111100101 010110101 0101011111 01101 1001110001 10011110101 11111011101 10110100101 0110101 11110101 11011 0100110100 1111101011 1111 101111111 1011011 100111010 101001 110010 0101100101001 0111100101 1110 1010111 1010111101 1100100100101 101111001 101110101 1101 011011 0101 1101 11101111001 101 1111 11101 1010101 110110101 101010101 1111101010101 11110101 11010101111101 10111111 11101 1110101 11111010011 1110111 0100111 100010101 1110101 1110010010 1111101 10101111001 11010111111 100101110 011101 111101011 1010101 111110010 101101 11100110 01 1011101 111010101 1101001 1101111 11011111100 1111111010111010110010101 101111 1000100 0101
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 3,722
Words 726
Sentences 41
Stanzas 24
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 3, 5, 4, 3, 4, 5, 4, 3, 1, 2, 4, 4, 7, 5, 4, 4, 4, 4, 5, 5, 3, 5
Lines Amount 96
Letters per line (avg) 30
Words per line (avg) 6
Letters per stanza (avg) 119
Words per stanza (avg) 26

About this poem

I wrote this poem to reflect upon the lost purness, innocence, and consciousness as a child, as I grow up and meet other compromises. I find this poem a way for me to express these thoughts and feelings through a misty, dreamy way and end in a warm elegy and reunion.

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Written on July 12, 2023

Submitted by Yukiv on July 23, 2023

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Yuqing Wu

As a high-school student interested in biology and literature, I explore the lines through poetry to express my senses and contemplation about observation, life, time, spirit, etc. more…

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