Analysis of If life were right!



What is sleep?
 If nightmares are dreams!
Yet, what is love if it goes away without a hug!
 Yet, what are spaces, if they blank out your mind as if you also do not have a heart!
 What is basic if everything you've ever had is gone and shared with all others until the point you have nothing you even want!
 What is keeping as if it were yours in the first place!
 Why say this?
Yet, because what is sacred when you betrayed me is the only words she left on your go away list!
 Money, yea, dummy I have a lot of it I wish I was saying!
Since you wanted to hear it there you go!
 Why should it matter when all people do is take it!
At least one day maybe my life will not be waisted!
 I'm not referring to drugs I'm referring to love mine was mistaken and hated!
 I'm done please this time no face lift!
As if anyone cares I almost died jumping off the latter while cleaning gutters just to try to have an extra dollar!
 Life to me, is hainous!
No one cared so now you can applause each other the way you say it!
Any more some do not want to love me thank you exactly for the way you explained it!


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Poetic Form
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Closest metre Iambic octameter
Characters 1,097
Words 240
Sentences 19
Stanzas 1
Stanza Lengths 18
Lines Amount 18
Letters per line (avg) 46
Words per line (avg) 12
Letters per stanza (avg) 834
Words per stanza (avg) 223

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Short poem just explaining my thoughts!

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Written on April 15, 2023

Submitted by devonb.14033 on April 15, 2023

Modified on April 15, 2023

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Devon Bates

I was born in Norfolk Virginia! Then I moved to Fayetteville North Carolina were I was raised and I reside today! I have kids and I am divorced! I am 41 I was born on July 18 1980! I love being a cancer I love who I am and God! more…

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