Analysis of Moving on without you
What do I do with the breast that leaks, with no one to feed?
For the body that has been stretched and the private that bleeds?
What do I say to the little clothes that you’ll never get to wear?
The bows and the headbands that will never adorn your hair
What do I say to the car seat and that it’s a girl/boy balloon?
How do I decide between you being cremated or you being left alone in a tomb?
No answer for my soul mourns
Your life mattered, you were stillborn
I guess the best that I can do, is keep your memory alive
I can live life for you
When I look at a flower I can think of what your name means
I can hold you for hours even if it’s only in my dreams
I can talk to you out loud because that doesn’t mean I’m crazy
Though you’re not physically here, your spirit resides with me
You will always be my baby
I don’t know why this happened
Even though the doctors try to explain
I can not fathom not raising you
The idea drives me insane
I know that you’re at peace
Probably playing in the clouds
To be your mother, of that privilege I am proud
Send me a sign and let me know when you’re around
It can be a hummingbird or some familiar sound
I’m so sorry baby for the absence of your life and the time we won’t be able to spend
Just know that I can’t wait to see you once again❤️❤️❤️❤️ ©️Jazlynn Montgomery
Scheme | ABCCDEFGHIJKLLLMNINOPQRRSL |
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Poetic Form | |
Metre | 11111011111111 10101111001011 1111101011110111 0100111100111 1111101101101101 1111011101001110101001 1101111 11101011 1101111111110001 111111 111101011111111 1111110101110011 111111101111110 111100011100111 1111110 1111110 1010101101 111101101 00101101 111111 10010001 111101110111 110101111101 111010110101 11101010101110011111011 1111111111011010 |
Closest metre | Iambic hexameter |
Characters | 1,359 |
Words | 274 |
Sentences | 6 |
Stanzas | 1 |
Stanza Lengths | 26 |
Lines Amount | 26 |
Letters per line (avg) | 39 |
Words per line (avg) | 10 |
Letters per stanza (avg) | 1,014 |
Words per stanza (avg) | 267 |
About this poem
This poem is dedicated to my daughter Mulan who passed away at birth December 20,2022. Just know that mommy will always love you and keep your memory alive.
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Written on December 20, 2022
Submitted by montgomeryjazlynn91 on February 11, 2023
Modified on March 14, 2023
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