Analysis of juice



I rushed the river of believe
Scooped a palm full
Washed my mouth
to call her name

On the outside
I shared my skin with some sun
stretching blank canvas sheets like Picasso ....
drag your fingers on it
drawing with liquified pain,
leaving me to cure alone
under the 3 p.m. Sun.

On the inside
I was hiding in a nameless shack
I named it melancholy gray
an omen of what's to come,
hoping for better days
if she came to me,
Juice from her lips is all I needed
For a rush of blood to the vines,
nourishing purpose to my infant lyrics.

Juice stagnated in her head
must be stirred, not shaken
sinking her dagger teeth in me
for the perfect dose.
let it flow; let me feel it,
coming back again.
It’s the charged current,
stinging the flesh.
That lays us down, focused
drunk & oblivious to the outside.

With all I have left, I rise
I rush again to the river of believe
crossing the threshold of pain
that's lying on the side  
Scooped a palm full
Washed my mouth
to call her name …  
(Elsee)


Scheme aBCD efghixf exxxxjxxx xfjxhxxxxe xaieBCDg
Poetic Form
Metre 11010101 1011 111 1101 1011 1111111 1011011010 111011 10111 1011101 100111 1001 111000101 1111001 1101111 101101 11111 110111110 10111101 10010111010 110001 111110 10010101 10011 1111111 10101 10110 1001 111110 101001011 1111111 11011010101 100111 110101 1011 111 1101 1
Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 1,007
Words 223
Sentences 10
Stanzas 5
Stanza Lengths 4, 7, 9, 10, 8
Lines Amount 38
Letters per line (avg) 20
Words per line (avg) 5
Letters per stanza (avg) 152
Words per stanza (avg) 38

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wanting a more high

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Written on September 30, 2022

Submitted by azdi404 on March 02, 2023

Modified by azdi404 on March 20, 2023

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