Analysis of Haunting Valley

Pin Lim 1982 (Montreal)



There are times when I can't seem to fall asleep and I don't know why
Lying on my bed looking at the city lights hiding the darken sky
Like something is missing in my life, lurking around like a shadow
Feels like an invisble force surronding me, making me hollow

I know something is there but Is it really ? mind is playing tricks on me...
The world can feel like an empty place when you go solo on this journey
To one day show the world I've found that person and tell stories
And build something beautiful that can last a lifetime full of memories

You often hear the expression of it's better to be single then having bad company
I'd rather taste the feeling of pain instead enduring long days of solitary
But I ain't no fool to let anyone into my arms and let them make me feel shame
To the right person, you can drop to your knees by just the mention of their name

Waiting for who knows when to arrive and if that moment will ever come
Just make the best of what I have and see what the man I can become
Keep myself busy from wandering thoughts that lead to nowhere but headaches
Maybe then I'll have something to show that ll spark interest

Trying to control my chatty mind is not an easy thing to say or do
Like endless thoughts of being enough for someone, like some sort of preview
I know I shouldn't never doubt myself and make myself feel less than nothing
As long that I'm still breathing, there's always tomorrow to look forward to something


Scheme AABB CCDD CCEE FFXX GGHH
Poetic Form Quatrain  (80%)
Metre 1111111110101111 101111010101100101 1101100111001101 111111110110 111011111101110111 01111110111111110 111101111100110 01101001110111100 11010010111011101101100 11010101101010111100 11111111001110111111 1011011111111010111 101111101011101101 11011111011011101 111011001111111 10111101111110 1010111011111011111 1101110011111111 11110101101111110 111111011011110110
Characters 1,457
Words 282
Sentences 3
Stanzas 5
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4
Lines Amount 20
Letters per line (avg) 58
Words per line (avg) 14
Letters per stanza (avg) 231
Words per stanza (avg) 56

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Sometimes loneliness and the past comes back...

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Written on May 01, 2022

Submitted by edilions on May 01, 2022

Modified on April 26, 2023

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