Analysis of Loyalties Lie



Where do your loyalties lie,
And do they lie with honest eyes?
He's built a life with one hand clean,
And the other pulling at sand underneath,
Eyes wide with surprise
When it all comes crashing down,
Or maybe a simple shrug and a boyish grin.
He must think foundations come and go,
But his world becomes a little more cynical
With each round of destruction.

She will bid him farewell, if she knows what's best -
Out of the damage path and on with the rest,
A little wiser and more jaded than before.
Oh well, she may sigh, as she releases the last
Of her cries...
I thought he was "the one",
But all his little deceptions added windows
To this house built on sand,
And a foundation of thrown stones.


Scheme XAXXAXXXXB CCXXABXXX
Poetic Form
Metre 1111001 01111101 11011111 0010101101 11101 1111101 110010100101 111010101 111010101100 1111010 1111111111 11010101101 010100110101 111111101001 101 111101 111100101010 111111 00010111
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 692
Words 134
Sentences 6
Stanzas 2
Stanza Lengths 10, 9
Lines Amount 19
Letters per line (avg) 29
Words per line (avg) 7
Letters per stanza (avg) 276
Words per stanza (avg) 67

About this poem

A friend cheated on a friend. They were engaged at the time her partner strayed, not for the first time. I wrote this poem in her honor, before I knew whether or not she would leave him. I still don't know what she did.

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Written on June 05, 2018

Submitted by KrissLuckett on September 20, 2021

Modified on March 05, 2023

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Kriss Luckett

Songwriter, amateur poet, professional performing musician. I'm also an artist, and "mom" to an amazing 12 year old son. I live in Indianapolis, IN with my husband and son (who are my musical partners), and a ridiculous number of pets. I'm a self-employed massage therapist, and have owned my own business since 2015. In my rare spare time, I like to kayak, camp, and bake, and I collect vinyl records. I have been a performing musician for 32 years, with roots in punk and alt-rock and modern folk. My non-musical writing has been mostly for my own personal enjoyment, but I am broadening my scope of exposure, and hope to publish at some point. I have recorded 6 albums in my music career, with aspirations of recording a solo record at some point in the near future. My inspiration comes from my own experiences, the experiences of friends and characters, musings on the state of the world and life in general, and stories I make up. I am not a "look out my window and ponder the flowers" sort of writer, although there's nothing wrong with that. I began writing for enjoyment in high school, when I had a teacher who recognized my penchant for writing "dark stories", and encouraged me to keep at it. I grew up in small town Indiana, where "girls just don't write such things", so I have kept most of my edgier writing to myself. This is the first place I've published anything that wasn't songwriting. Hope you enjoy my work. more…

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