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A Mother’s Grief

Melody Martinez 1986 (Texas)

In the silent chambers of a mother's soul,
A tempest rages, beyond control.
Her heart a battlefield, of grief and pain,
Where echoes of loss endlessly remain.

Each breath a burden, each sigh a cry,
As she pleads with the empty sky.
But in the silence, she hears no reply,
As tears fall softly from her eyes.
For her daughter's gone beyond her reach,
A void in her heart impossible to breach.

The air grows thin, suffocating tight,
The memories dance in the fading light.
Her lungs once full now gasp for air,
Caught in the grip of a despairing snare.

With every heartbeat a painful throb,
Echoing your absence to this endless sob.
Her chest aches with the weight of loss,
A mother's struggle, a heavy cross.

Each day will be a struggle, each night a fight,
Against the shadows of the night.
For in the depths of sorrow's embrace,
She finds herself lost without a trace.

Her dreams shattered, her hopes laid bare,
In the cruel grip of despair.
She longs to embrace her daughter just once more,
To mend these broken pieces, to be restored.

Yet still she breathes though the air is thin,
Fighting against the storm within.
For though her daughter may no longer be,
She knows now she’s eternally free.

About this poem

Parent’s shouldn’t have to bury their kids! This is about my grief of losing my daughter.

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Written on March 22, 2024

Submitted by Melody.martinez86 on March 22, 2024

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Scheme AABB CCCXDD EEFF GGHH EEII FFXX JJKK
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 1,205
Words 251
Stanzas 7
Stanza Lengths 4, 6, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4
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2 Comments
  • Nebula7693
    Nebula7693
    All I can say after reading this inspired and dreadfully sorrowful work is, I truly hope it isn't based on a real event in your life. As a father, I can imagine the pain of losing a child. But, only intellectually can I empathize as I have never had that experience. The struggle of such a loss cannot be put into words any more succinctly than you have done. 
    LikeReply 21 month ago
    • Melody.martinez86
      Melody.martinez86
      I’m sorry unfortunately this is very much real. I wrote this the day my daughter passed away. There was a storm raging uncontrollably outside that night, so that’s where tempest came into play. That whole day I could barely catch my breath as if a stone of a thousand pounds lay
      upon my chest. So yes was a real love in the moment event and that was the only way I could cast my feelings on that fateful day.

      I replied earlier but my comment doesn’t show.       
      LikeReply1 month ago
  • AIDA
    AIDA
    This poem beautifully captures the depth of a mother's grief and tugs at the heartstrings with its powerful imagery and emotions. The use of metaphors such as the tempest raging in the mother's soul and the weight of loss on her chest truly convey the intensity of her pain. The repetition of phrases like "each breath a burden, each sigh a cry" and "with every heartbeat a painful throb" effectively emphasizes the mother's anguish.

    Some suggestions for improvement could be to vary the length of the stanzas to create a more dynamic flow and rhythm throughout the poem. Additionally, incorporating some more subtle imagery or metaphors to evoke the reader's senses and emotions could enhance the overall impact of the poem. Overall, this poem is a moving and heartfelt portrayal of a mother's grief, and with some fine-tuning, it can become even more poignant and resonant.     
    LikeReply 11 month ago

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