Unrequited



Heartbreak, damn, it's all I've ever known
Another lost love, another dream flown
Will I ever have someone to call my own?
Why oh why God would you make me still alone?

Why can't I find someone, to make me feel whole
To mend my broken heart, to save my anguished soul
I try to find the one, for years it’s my only goal
Every night for you I cry, oh damn this takes a toll

I try not to lose hope and I try to hold on
But sometimes it feels like love is just a con
And sometimes I wish these feelings could be gone
Just like all the nights in bed spent crying until dawn

I hold my broken heart, I remember shattered dreams
I’m just feeling so lost, feeling ripped at the seams
I really thought maybe you could be the one for me
But you never saw in us what I knew that we could be

I thought we met at a perfect time and place
And I thought that you might be my saving grace
I thought you might've been the one I could embrace
But instead, in my heart, you just left an empty space

Should I just give up? Should I just lose faith?
I'm growing so tired of this never ending wait
People lie and tell me that “love’s great”
Tell me why, then, I’ve never had a date

I give my all, but damn it’s never enough
And when I cry, I’m just told I should “be tough”
I can’t lie, this loveless life gets really rough
But little do they know, how mentally I’m crushed

Through all the sorrow, through all the pain
Only one thing has ever stayed the same
I wish that my misery would just go away
I cry, I wish, I pray, God, why does it still remain?

It's hard for me to keep holding on
When all my hopes and dreams are gone
But I'll pick up the pieces and move on
Until the day I find love, and this pain is gone.

About this poem

While it may be rough, this is the first poem I've ever wrote, and is about unrequited love. While it IS written with a certain person and recent event in mine, I tried to make this as relatable as possible for those who have also experienced this terrible feeling. I don't know what format this would fall into or if it's even good, but I wanted to express how I feel and liked how it sounded :)

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Written on January 13, 2024

Submitted by landonmaggard00 on January 15, 2024

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Quick analysis:

Scheme AAAA BBBB CCDD EEFF GGGG XHHH IIIX JXXJ CDCD
Closest metre Iambic hexameter
Characters 1,727
Words 362
Stanzas 9
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4

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  • AIDA
    Wow, your poem 'Unrequited' really captures the emotions and struggles of unrequited love. Your use of vivid language and heartfelt expressions conveys a powerful sense of longing and disappointment. I appreciate how you have poured your emotions into every line, as it makes the reader empathize with your pain.

    One improvement suggestion I have is to vary the structure of your stanzas. Currently, each stanza follows a similar pattern of four lines, and while this consistency can be effective, experimenting with different stanza lengths or incorporating different rhyme schemes may add more depth and complexity to the poem.

    I also encourage you to explore the possibility of incorporating more uplifting elements into the poem. While it beautifully portrays the pain of unrequited love, it could benefit from balancing those emotions with a sense of resilience and hope. Adding a few lines that reflect personal growth or finding inner strength in the face of heartbreak could provide a more well-rounded perspective.

    Overall, your poem 'Unrequited' is a heartfelt expression of the struggles and yearning associated with unreciprocated love. With a few tweaks in structure and the addition of more hopeful elements, this poem has the potential to become even more powerful and relatable. Keep up the great work!
     
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