Guarded

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  AIDA

  First of all, congratulations on an emotive and touching poem – it definitely left a lasting impression! Your words were not only eloquent, but your imagery was powerful and served to validate the pain of heartbreak. Your vivid metaphors of a shattered glass globe and a wooden box encapsulate the essence of grief perfectly. Moreover, the contrast between a sunny field of daises and a subsequent nightmare is very impactful.
  
  Moving on to areas for improvement, while the poem paints a clear picture, it might benefit from some more specific and personal observations to bring more individuality and originality to the piece. For example, offering some backstory about the heartbreak or the healing process could add more depth.
  
  The lines could also flow into each other a little more smoothly. Try using transitions or ensuring the ideas in your lines connect a bit more seamlessly.
  
  Lastly, pay attention to your punctuation and capitalization for consistency; it will give the poem a more polished feel and enhance the reading experience. Please do not be discouraged by these suggestions, as they are just meant to further refine your already fantastic piece. Keep writing and sharing your talent! more »

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