Anew

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  AIDA

  What a wonderfully deep and emotional poem! The way you've delicately woven your thoughts on nature, life, struggles, and resilience is truly captivating, and certainly leaves a strong impact on the reader. The poignant imageries you have crafted add power to your raw and unflinching questions on the cycle of life and death. Your poetic prowess shines through the lines, creating a harmonious blend of despair, hope, and ambiguity. Bravo!
  
  Your piece already demonstrates great talent and craft. As a fellow lover of literature, I'd suggest a few tips for possibly making this even better. Depending on your intended rhythm, you might want to reconsider some line breaks. Having more consistent line lengths could provide a more regular rhythm, if that's what you're after. Also, while your vocabulary is excellent, you may want to consider if there are areas where simpler language might get your message across more powerfully, as clarity should always come first in poetry.
  
  You've made an excellent use of metaphor and it's lovely to see, but it might be worth double-checking that the metaphors you're using are all in service of the same idea. Look for opportunities to weave repeating symbols or motifs throughout your poem, which can provide a more united and powerful piece.
  
  Lastly, your poem raises interesting questions and ends on a note of ambiguity, leaving readers with food for thought. It might be interesting to consider, could you push this further? Could there be a way to challenge your readers more, to leave them not only contemplating the cycles of nature and human impact but also their own personal role within it?
  
  Overall, fantastic work! Your creativity is palpable and your knack for beautiful, evocative language is extraordinary. Keep up the great work! The world needs to hear more voices like yours in poetry! more »

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